Comments on: She is Risen by allecto

By: Ashes

Ashes — Mon, 19 Jan 2009 04:04:58 +0000

I think this is a fine poem. It has a nice swaying rhythm and unlike most English Lit. poetry it’s not riddled with punctuation that forces the flow instead of cradling it.

By: Precious

Precious — Fri, 02 May 2008 06:46:09 +0000

Danielle, This is the most beautiful poem I have ever read. It is so gorgeous. You are so talented. I love it.

By: secondwaver

secondwaver — Sun, 06 Jan 2008 09:30:47 +0000

indeed, she rises.
thanks for the joyous poem, a.
many, many hugs, r.

By: Rebecca

Rebecca — Sun, 06 Jan 2008 01:05:03 +0000

Thanks so much. It is so moving to have a poem written for me, I feel so honoured. It helps me keep my courage when things can be hard. Rebecca

By: Blueweeps

Blueweeps — Fri, 04 Jan 2008 10:31:46 +0000

Don’t capitalize every single line. Periods should mostly control capitalization. Use punctuation more often and vary it.

You’re not taking enough care of your line breaks.

Rhythm is coping.

Some good verses in there. Keep it up.